Show not tell

SHOW NOT TELL 1.Mary’s sister was waiting in the car, she was pressing down on the steering wheel. While she was moaning in the car Mary was looking for her shows. Her legs were as fast as the wind. Her hands were digging through cloths like a truck digging mud out of the ground. Mary’s sister’s face was getting red. 


 2.It was the last minute of the final match of the basketball competition. Tama had to shot  penalty shots to win the finals. All of the team was relying on him. Looking at the hoop Tama was trying to concentrate but there was lots of noise. 


 He bounced the ball about 5 times then hopped of the ground and flung his hands out in front of him. Flying across the court the ball hit the edge of the rim, rolling round the hoop it went of the side and miss. He missed the rest of the shots and then the other team jumped up with pride.



 Tama was sad. After the game one of the teammates was talking about him. He lost his mind and through a fit/tantrum.